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  sherab : Myna Qui

friends, kin, and travellers.

sherab said Mar 25, 11:49 AM:

~o~
I Dreamt that I had Quarreled with my Brother
and Woke to find His Blood on both my Hands.

Sister Told me we were Both born only Children
and our Kindred wandered Far across the Land.

Each of Us must  Search to find our Mothers;
Take our Places in the Family of Man.

As we Gather up our Promises and Wisdom
and Suffer in this Place of blood and Sand

Learn to See your fathers' Loving Heart
In Every one you Meet,
and Hear his breath in Every word you Say

Someday You and I will Meet again as Strangers
Pray we greet as Friends and fellow Travellers
and Recognize our Kinship on the Way.
~o~
Don't look surprised!
Poor old William
Shook off his winding sheet
And stumbled into sunlight!

-March 25, 2008



 
I woke from a dream and wrote this.

The first three couplets took fifteen or twenty miutes, and the rest, capitals and style, took the remaindier of the hour.
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  jenni : searcher

Re: friends, kin, and travellers.

jenni said Mar 25, 2:38 PM:

hey william,

 neat to awaken with a poem
 I like the part about seeing your father's heart in everyone you meet and meeting again as strangers and praying to greet as friends and fellow travelers. i love that, jen

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  Sol : Spiritual Nudist

Re: friends, kin, and travellers.

Sol said Mar 25, 3:13 PM:

Powerful dream..

I like the biblical language..Massive pictures..

The first four paragraphes could easily stand alone..

Like the ending..Takes the entire grandiose symbolism into the daily life..”Stumbled into sunlight”

The Ultimate Accident..Beautiful..

Those poems that I have read from you, have stayed with me for a while..This one will too, “Take our Places in the Family of Man”….

Made me want to dream a poem too..

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  Nicole : lovelightsinger

Re: friends, kin, and travellers.

Nicole said Mar 25, 4:05 PM:

Ah! resurrection. Very timely…  I'm intrigued with your use of capitals… care to share why you did them like that?

Beautiful piece,

Love,

Nicole

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  quietlaughter : .

Re: friends, kin, and travellers.

quietlaughter said Mar 25, 5:08 PM:

hello William - how beautiful. I love when poems do that… very special poem I think. thank you for sharing it with us!


It reminds me of the agreements made before birth…


la

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  Tom : Mesocosmic Traveller

Re: friends, kin, and travellers.

Tom said Mar 26, 1:24 PM:

William, that was utterly lovely and inspiring. Reminds me of Kahil Gibrhan. The tone of the piece and the way you use the words raises it in formality, makes it step out of the quotidian and into the legendary. It is very biblical, seeming prophetic and from some unknown ritual. Have to mention that I think it works best for me without the last stanza. The last stanza is charming by itself, but for me it lets some of the air out of the wonderful balloon I had been floating in. If you meant to bring us back abruptly into real life, almost a waking up as William does in the poem, then it worked perfectly, but I kind of liked that other place better.

Love,

Tom

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  Josy : Poet, Dreamer, Threshold-Girl

Re: friends, kin, and travellers.

Josy said Mar 29, 9:35 AM:

I enjoyed this one!

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